2012 national competition project #015 | cafeteria redesign: Recent activity

Your overview is very important as it allows you to clearly articulate the issues you intend to tackle. It also allows you to think about problems through good clear writing before you put pen or pencil to paper.

The outdoor seating located on the new balconies would surely provide an enjoyable space for students to eat and relax. This is located on the 7th floor correct? You may want to study in section (with sun altitude and orientation in mind) how the new balcony would impact the natural light reaching the floors below.

I am very intrigued by the unique quiet area that you have designed, but I am not clear as to what inspired the idea or how it exactly functions. For example, since earlier you did not state the challenges or problems your design is solving, I might be missing if this room is addressing a specific concern that you had observed. The seating facing the wall seems anti-social where as the round table in the middle the opposite. How do you envision the room being used?

While I can see that this image illustrates a concept that you later carry through during the development of the design, I would enjoy reading a more descriptive narrative here as to what about this image inspired you or what aspects about it specifically do you wish to incorporate into your design and why?

The inclusion of the north arrow is terrific. Adding room names and differentiation of line weight (for example exterior walls thicker than interior walls) would help make the plan even clearer for others.

Don't forget that the Overview is your chance to write a short description of the problems you will be trying to solve in redesigning your school cafeteria.

I'm not sure what happened here but there is no walkthrough of the cafeteria. That would have been a welcome addition.

This is a very descriptive perspective. I'd love to see more shots like these throughout the presentation. One other comment: you should consider material selection and color to try and make the space as exciting and inviting as possible.

This is very effective in conveying the size of the table in the room. There's a lot of unused space that might be better used with a rectangular table. It would have been great to see those comparisons much earlier in your process.

My only concern is that this appears to be exactly the same model as the one from the previous section. Remember: these are different phases of a process and must look distinctly different. The earlier phase is still one of discovery and this is one of final presentation.