Eaguilar's Account

The park looks nice, but it could use a better sense of scale. By adding people, and the people don't even have to be realistic they could just be dark cutouts, it helps viewers understand the scale of the park a bit better. Park looks good on it's own though!

I like how you have the fountain in the center to draw in the community into the center of the park.

I like how you took the time to show all of the shadows in the park. I find this very important when considering shade and how it will effect all of the activities that take place within the park.

Your pocket park design is looking great. One suggestion I have is to spell check and check your grammar on the post. Keep in mind, the judges will look at everything you have written. Overall, great pocket park.

You need some freehand sketches also.

Sketches are good, but the Lego models should be labeled for clarification. Also, there appears to be too much area unaccounted for. Space is a little too empty.

I would consider most the water line and electricity because this is the most vital part of a place. - Ellerslie Training

The relationship of site to the current building is not clear in your research - labeling current facilities on the overall site plan would be helpful for us to see as judges (who have no background knowledge of your school). The bubble diagrams you provided show appropriate separation of spaces and create a clear path for your design process. The idea of turf under basketball court needs further explanation, is the court removable? This could be an efficient use of space. The quality of your renderings is really beautiful, but maybe you spent a little too much time focusing on interior layouts of bathrooms, lockers, etc. and not enough on the overall facility organizational concept. Birdseye views with existing surrounding context plus ground level renderings of public entry spaces would have been helpful to sell your overall project but were not highlighted in your presentation.

I love the idea that you want this space to influence and improve the community around it. That's a great starting point for a design. Your renderings look great, but could use some people in them to show the scale better. Great job!

The final design should show all aspects of the project (plans, sections, etc) so we can see the big picture. I would like to see more explanation as to "why" you made certain design choices. For example:why is one space by another? Why does the school need this type of facility? Etc... Also, presentation is important. Each step should have an explanation of your thought process that tells a story about your building and the vision you have for it. Also, watch your grammar - proper grammar, spelling, formatting are crucial for a good presentation.

-Great use of color in the interior
-The public (non-athletic) spaces should be better highlighted